Stingermissle 发表于 2011-12-21 21:40:33

【渣英文填词】碎月 butterfly(????)

本帖最后由 Stingermissle 于 2011-12-21 21:47 编辑

起因来自群里的一次聊天,让我有了创作的想法,但是写完后直接跪掉了……好渣……

http://disk.nyasama.com/filestores/2011/12/21/1f94b039a21e8f2854a38d95a9a82da6.mp3

Time’s floating to the end of sky
Sun rise and falls day and night
Season tansforms and climate changes as usual
Water flows and never returns

Under the moonlight, I see the beauty of you
Black hair like water fall with the silver shine upon
Dancing under the broken moon
Blinking, weaving like a butterfly.

Years have gone, and memory has faded
But you’re still dancing under the broken moon
In my eye, in my head and in my mind.
You’re my dear butterfly.

Sunlight falls on and I open my eyes.
Cars horning,peoples wondering all by my side.
The time flies and stranger’s come all along
Can’t stop the tears fulfilling my eyes.

You take my hands and kindly smiles
“Luck goes away with the sign”
Watching you dancing in the night.
Screwing, waving like a butterfly.

Now I am old, and I am dumb.
But you’re still dancing under the broken moon
In my eye, in my head and in my mind.
You’re my dear butterfly.


(各种语法错误,各种坑爹,我闪一边去……)

清水星 发表于 2011-12-21 21:55:21

幸好不是某个小燕子鲁冰花的填词(虽然那个也不坏……)
但是呢……你的英语虽然自己说各种语法错误,但怎么看也不明,可以读音大概很配合

sywdddd 发表于 2011-12-21 22:19:26

第二句似乎应该是Sun rises……
好吧我个初中生不能这么插一腿的……

呆呆木花 发表于 2011-12-21 22:36:01

哼~整体的意思理解了,语法问题只是零星的而已
英文填词什么的很棒啊,至少对于不懂日文的呆呆椛来说~
歌词的内容有种“人面不知何处去,桃花依旧笑春风”的感觉(额,个人感觉而已请无视)

Lizard3 发表于 2011-12-21 23:19:21

又见英语……
不过我想知道这词到底咋唱到歌里去!

今天发福了 发表于 2011-12-22 01:29:13

本帖最后由 今天发福了 于 2011-12-24 20:40 编辑

Time is soaring to the end of sky
Sun rises and falls within day and night
Season circlesbut climate never changes
yet Water will never flow back


drench in the moonlight, your amazing beauty
Black hair like a fall with silver shine
Dancing under the broken moon
Blinking, weaving like a butterfly.


Years have gone, and memoryfaded alone   
But you’re still dancing under the broken moon   
In my eye, in my head and in my drained mind.
You’re my dear butterfly.

Now I am old, and I am probably a little dumb.
but the sight I have seen will never break down
In my eye, in my head and in my drained mind.
You’re my dear butterfly.

Sunlight falls on and I open my eyes.
Cars horning,peoples wondering all by my side.
strangers come all along ,time goes by
Can’t stop the tears fulfilling my eyes.


You take my hands and just kindly smiles
“Luck never goes away holding this sign”
Watching your dancein the amazing night.
Screwing, waving like a butterfly.


修改了一点点
唔,本人英语更渣刺弹勿打XD
另外bgm我觉得找个更舒缓的比较符合词数吧?(本人英语语速低)

百合洎 发表于 2011-12-22 11:31:00

日语无力·····英语仍然无力···········oh~my dog!!!!

udumbara 发表于 2012-2-14 13:52:10

啊……我大概能理解别人看我词的感觉了……果然英文更顺口嘛!
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